Comments on: UNTITLED by Clitoris Rex

By: zombob

zombob — Fri, 20 Aug 2010 17:32:08 +0000

OK — I seem to have reached the end. I started on the “current” page a couple months ago and have been hitting the “older stories” button for weeks.

I have to ask though, especially considering how old this is, am I missing something?

In one paragraph, “When I came back…” you are railing about the barflies ignorance of what just transpired in the basement. Then in the next paragraph, “I got there and …” you are outside the bar, inside a car, outside a car, walking up to somebody who just destroyed the bar. I feel like a missed a transition somewhere in there.

Did this story get chopped some time in the past few years?

By: DamnTurk

DamnTurk — Thu, 30 Jul 2009 21:51:51 +0000

Very Noir, sin city-esq writing. Perfect.

By: Clitoris Rex

Clitoris Rex — Wed, 03 Dec 2008 15:35:42 +0000

No problem. click my name for my blog. my email is there.

By: rudi parrish

rudi parrish — Sun, 30 Nov 2008 01:45:08 +0000

your writing style is the shit. Would it beworth it or okay by you to run by you some rough drafts of some story Ideas I have?

By: rudi parrish

rudi parrish — Sun, 30 Nov 2008 01:43:21 +0000

I personally thought it was very well written

By: Tom Hamilton

Tom Hamilton — Sun, 20 Apr 2008 01:50:12 +0000

Rex is the best writer on this site. Viciously Great story.

By: ARNA

ARNA — Tue, 08 Apr 2008 07:31:46 +0000

“Play it again, Sam”

By: James F. Reilly

James F. Reilly — Sat, 01 Mar 2008 19:56:08 +0000

I quite liked this. Very hard-boiled, nasty, and rhythmic, like some sort of beat era poem gone to hell. Groovy!

By: Mercurial Georgia

Mercurial Georgia — Sun, 20 Jan 2008 01:33:37 +0000

It’s palatable I suppose, I but I was expecting something much better, considering the other contest winning entry, “Lilies for Donald”.