Comments on: LOST POTENTIAL by Tamara Wilhite

By: Clement S.

Clement S. — Sat, 14 Aug 2010 05:34:55 +0000

Great concept but the execution is pitifully weak. Please develop your characters so that they behave in a more believable way; I doubt a seasoned researcher/pathologist/medical snoop would suffer such immediate hysteria in his/herself, I doubt a general staff nurse would misunderstand the “general contact” question.

I do like the concept but the “telling” of it needs work. Just an opinion.

By: Oppressed1

Oppressed1 — Thu, 15 Jul 2010 04:23:12 +0000

I like it. Keep up the good work. Your attention to detail is provoking.

By: Cherry Darling

Cherry Darling — Fri, 04 Dec 2009 00:12:35 +0000

This was a very unique take on the zombie tale and very good use of suspense.

By: fred

fred — Sun, 27 Sep 2009 12:11:05 +0000

I loved the cluelessness of the situation.Hilarious.Cool story.

By: Terry Schultz

Terry Schultz — Tue, 01 Sep 2009 05:39:19 +0000

I like this one because of the mind set. The main characters realization that the shit has hit the fan echoes how alot of people would deal with the situation. Get as far away as fast as you can.

Liam, I would like to read your idea as a story as well. I think that would make for a great series of stories based on each groups perspective.

Tamara, great story.

By: Liam

Liam — Fri, 10 Jul 2009 21:57:58 +0000

Cool. I had an idea for a post-apocalyptic order of combat doctors called the Knights Medicus. Essentially, they were a psuedo-knightly order that was formed from hundreds of thousands of surviving doctors, as well as U.N. Coalition personnel, who would all train future generations of Knights in the arts of combat and healing; furthermore, their overall goal is to keep the human race healthy by sending groups of knights on patrols, or “rounds,” to thin out the zombies and provide medical aid to survivors. The organizationis split into different sub-orders: Preliators (primarily fighters; mostly trained in combat), Equites (primarily responsible for crewing and maintaining the Order’s vehicle fleets), Hippocratii (primary healers and psychologists), and finally, the most feared branch, the Umbra (elite assassin Knights that put the Preliators to shame. They are deployed to infiltrate survivor groups and slay anyone who kills a Knight, or commits atrocities. Even other Knights are suspicious of them).

By: Andre

Andre — Sat, 03 Jan 2009 05:58:53 +0000

I liked your style though it was a little slow to build but I could not buy the ending. If the disease was already in the open then I am sure that there would have been widespread knowledge of it in the medical community before the government started wholesale bombing of facilities where it might be. It was very sad and depressing. Good writing though.

By: Ed

Ed — Fri, 02 Jan 2009 19:43:03 +0000

I really liked your story and your writing. thanks for sharing it.

By: Gary

Gary — Sun, 07 Sep 2008 09:56:52 +0000

Excellent story. Strong narrative, great build-up, wonderful conclusion. I’m looking forward to more from you!