Comments on: MORNING IN A BASEMENT by Laurence Munnikhuysen

By: Living Dead Girl

Living Dead Girl — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 19:24:17 +0000

I get what Andre said, wondering about the life of the couple before he was infected. Perhaps he was controlling and abusive to her. That’s why she gets a kick out of controlling and abusing him, then saying kind words after the beating…just like he did when he was alive. I can imagine…as I have been in 2 abusive relationships myself. During the last one, I often fantasized about tying him up while he was asleep and punching and stomping him as he awoke, but at the same time I missed him and came back everytime I left. I agree with the others that the main character seemed robotic, but nonetheless, this was a great zombie tale. Thinking about all that I’ve been through, I often wonder, when I pass by the homes of other people, what’s going on behind closed doors.

By: Andre

Andre — Sun, 28 Dec 2008 03:10:52 +0000

Interesting story and well told for the most part. I really liked the whole back story about his having been shipwrecked on a navy frigate. I would love to know the whole story behind that adventure.

I suppose the farm had gas generator power of some sort. Considering the place looked long abandoned in the first part of the story was kind of contradictory. Other than that is was pretty good and kind of sad. The whole thing with the wife and the whip makes yo think about what their lives were like when he was alive. It makes you think about how living people with their twisted secrets would act when the added stress of the end of civilization and the removal of punishments for taboos would affect them. Good food for thought.

By: ico

ico — Sun, 28 Sep 2008 04:40:28 +0000

This was pretty good. I find some of the stories alittle wordy. I’m an avid reader but i find that problem with alot of the stuff that i read. There are points where i almost yell “get on with the story!” But i liked this, it was to the point.

I sent a story to this site alittle while ago, i’m just waiting for it to be added.

By: Derek

Derek — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 19:16:10 +0000

Great story

By: Tim

Tim — Thu, 26 Jun 2008 11:02:19 +0000

this was a creepy story. i enjoyed the description of the zombie battle in the sheets of laundry.

By: Tarbh

Tarbh — Sat, 21 Jun 2008 04:26:37 +0000

Mark makes a very valid point on the use of “I” in this story. But there ends my agreement with him. The main character was not robotic, there was some very real actions and observations made by him. And the wife and “husband” just creeped me out. It’s also nice to see my home state get some recognition, even in an apocolypse!

By: L. Munnikhuysen

L. Munnikhuysen — Thu, 19 Jun 2008 11:42:28 +0000

Concerning Mark’s comment. I agree, this is not my best piece and certainly is done rather sloppily. However, I believe it is better than overusing gerunds or some other device. Don’t know whether to reuse this character or let him die here with my bad grammar; but criticism is always welcome, the harsher the better. Thanks Mark

By: Mark

Mark — Thu, 19 Jun 2008 11:15:06 +0000

There were quite a few grammar problems (missing commas and whatnot). It also seemed to switch from present to past tense on occasion. I (it might be just me) wasn’t too captivated by the story. I couldn’t really relate to the main character (he seemed robotic). I felt like the only reason I thought he was human was because I was told he was human, and I’ve never seen the word “I” used to the point of frustration. I don’t know if anyone else caught my blatant use of the word in this comment here.

It’s an alright story, but it’s not all that great. I do have to agree with Tiz, however. This story is better than no story at all.

By: Tiz

Tiz — Thu, 19 Jun 2008 09:10:34 +0000

Great story! Was going through withdrawals – no new stories since June 3rd, and what a great way to get back into it!

Hope to see more from you. Cheers.