Comments on: THE IANNA STRAIN by David Johanek

By: james glenn

james glenn — Tue, 12 Apr 2011 16:05:49 +0000

Leapologise for my atrosius spelling and gramma then im worikng a shit job as we speak and am loosing the will to live haha

By: james glenn

james glenn — Tue, 12 Apr 2011 16:04:37 +0000

loved your writing but like said before it got two intence two quick and i sort of lost interest at the part were they got to the first hummer not saying i could do better tho that was basicly one of the best origin stories ive ever read and i was absolutley hooked on the first third of the storie but by the ast third i gave up
defo keep writing tho as you got some serius talent bro!

By: frederick

frederick — Tue, 28 Sep 2010 05:50:30 +0000

i loved the part about the SDA objectors being used for bio-guinea pigs…i was raised an adventist(now i’m an agnostic) and that fits right in with adventist end-time philosopy…i’ll bet the author is either ex-sda or is familiar with that church…great story…fd

By: Will

Will — Mon, 09 Aug 2010 07:11:31 +0000

Let me start off by saying I liked the origins of the virus, and found the story overall to be interesting. That being said, I don’t need to be a Bush fan to see that the political and military cliche’s throughout this story are juvenile at best. Many a good writer have found themselves in this position, so just keep up the good work and try to not let your personal feelings piggyback on an otherwise interesting story, know what I mean?

By: Oppressed1

Oppressed1 — Wed, 14 Apr 2010 20:52:19 +0000

And in the end… All your base are belong to us.

By: Schoeneck

Schoeneck — Sat, 02 Jan 2010 07:46:00 +0000

Jay, I’ve been SF for just about 15 years now, you’d be suprised by some of the things I hear. You’re over-analyzing I think. The point of writing is so you can create whatever YOU yourself want to create, something that you can see and imagine in your minds eye. It’s not up to you to decide what the writer writes. You yourself, sound like Ford, imo. xD. Just because your SF doesn’t mean you are some God-Given justice server, a lot of them are insane, think about what their job is. You are partially right about the scientist, but again, the writer gets to write whatever they want. Kudos to the story, I enjoyed it, write more!

By: Cherry Darling

Cherry Darling — Fri, 27 Nov 2009 17:38:14 +0000

I’m not military, but I work for a group of very intelligent doctors who diagnose using proper medical jargon and discuss politics in detail but also use slang and vulgar language when around familiar people…not to mention owning guns, so I didn’t really think anything of the “inconsistencies” in your story until I read the comments. I now see where it could use some refining, but it was a really fun ride and I could picture the action as if it were a movie. You have a gift for bringing your words vividly to life. I saw the ancient skeleton sulking around the containment room, I saw Takura (who I pictured looking like the asian Guy on Dexter for some reason) going all Rambo and then getting his brains splattered and I pictured the press conference where the President really takes a bite out of crime. Good job!

By: fred

fred — Thu, 10 Sep 2009 06:49:35 +0000

I guess there’s a couple cheney/gw fans here.I agree,it’s a little ambitious for a short,but that’s what I take them for.Everything has to happen a little quicker than real life…It’s still a cool zombie story.

By: RandyB

RandyB — Wed, 14 Jan 2009 00:01:42 +0000

I know you have gotten hit on issues people have with your story, so let me start by saying the set up of this story was first rate. I loved the background and premise. I loved everything about it until you dove too much into things military. I have been in Service 18 years and I can’t imagine a General wanting to cause unnecessary harm to any soldiers regardless of the reason let alone shoot one in the back while he fled. That was way too hard to swallow. Also, a small civilian woman would never be able to apply acurate fire from a moving vehicle with an M2 because she watched Rambo. And the nose bone to the brain myth has been debunked for some time. Too much sinus cavity there for that to be possible. The straw that broke the camel’s back for me was the 105mm rounding blowing up the Humvee. Whether it was a sabot or HEAT round it wouldn’t have exploded. It would have simply punched through and killed the occupants from the pressure of the impact. I think the reason I am critical is because you started this story on such an acurate detailed tone and I was let down when it faltered toward the end into a parody of the beginning. Love the idea, just disappointed in the accuracy toward the end.