Comments on: MY STORY by Jack Bobinshot

By: JKnWWZ

JKnWWZ — Mon, 24 May 2010 06:50:32 +0000

working my way up from the first story and this was one of the BEST!! Great story!!
Sory abot th lossers who complaine about speling but its still a GREAT 1st Draft!! JK

By: Oppressed1

Oppressed1 — Wed, 14 Apr 2010 19:37:42 +0000

Good story. I liked it very much. Keep up the good work, as I look forward to reading more from you.

By: Broken 0351

Broken 0351 — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 02:22:47 +0000

Jack

First of all. I’ve read this story over 7 times and I don’t care what other useless punks say about spelling. This was an amazing story. As a marine myself its nice to see even outside of the corp we still can be put to use is a cool feeling. Please keep them coming. BTW my wife and I have matching G21’s. Its a cool feeling.

By: Paul

Paul — Wed, 10 Mar 2010 05:21:57 +0000

Damn good story, I loved it, keep it up

By: Doc Rock

Doc Rock — Fri, 01 Jan 2010 03:23:56 +0000

Semper Fi brother, great story and keep it up. kill.

By: Tyler

Tyler — Tue, 15 Dec 2009 03:59:26 +0000

p.s I didn’t mean up and coming novelists, I merely meant the ones that will contribute to this site

By: Tyler

Tyler — Tue, 15 Dec 2009 03:52:31 +0000

@ Jack
I just want to say that this was a thoroughly engaging story. Do not listen to such fascistic critics as “cory”.

@ cory
(If you actually have the guts to continue reading the flame you’re getting.)

Firstly, I would just like to say that language is constantly evolving and just because there is a particular rule for grammar or spelling, it doesn’t mean that this must be followed to the letter in all use of a language. If that were the case then there would be a lot more “thees” and “thous” in the very sentences you are writing. Or instead of a rifle we would be calling the things something similar to “stick of fire that shoots straighter and longer” Academics didn’t just turn round one day and change the whole language, average people (by making mistakes I might add,) caused rules to be dropped or changed.

Secondly, comments such as yours discourage up and coming writers from submitting their content for fear of ridicule. Face it we aren’t all English professors. Due to the complexity of the English language even native speakers of sufficient education will make constant mistakes. There is nothing wrong with pointing out typos and mistakes but doing so in a way which is condescending to the author? It’s just low man. Jack spent time producing this for your leisure; take that into account next time.

By: angstfilledmind

angstfilledmind — Sun, 29 Nov 2009 19:55:45 +0000

A very solid story told very well. I would love to see the final, “clean” copy instead of the earlier draft. In regards to grammar, punctuation, spelling, verb tense, etc.: for a fanfiction site, you get what you get. If one’s goal is print publication and the fanfiction site is a way to obtain feedback, then criticism concerning a work’s building blocks (proper use of the English language) is completely valid and to be expected and encouraged. It helps writers develop their craft. Print editors and literary agents also judge a writer’s potential based on the quality of work (including proper use of English) that he or she sends them. Errors serve as “speed bumps” in a work and they distract readers from the work’s substance. And, since commenters seem to want a CV to go with critical posts, here’s mine: I am a published writer and editor, and I often reject work that was sloppily edited by the writer prior to submission. Good writers understand their tools the way any craftsman does and great writers have mastered their tools. So, in conclusion, the story is a very good read and shows promise but needs revision (or a post of the final copy) to really judge its potential.

By: Tanya Vela

Tanya Vela — Fri, 20 Nov 2009 23:31:05 +0000

I think it’s great you used your military experience in your story. I look forward to more stories so keep up the good work and thank you for serving our country!