Comments on: NIGHT COMMANDER by Mark O’Neill

By: L Martin

L Martin — Fri, 11 Jun 2010 04:58:12 +0000

Loved the story. You had me laughing like a loon!

By: ScottB

ScottB — Sun, 30 May 2010 21:52:03 +0000

Loved it, I definately think you managed to capture Alzeimers as best as it can be done. I really felt for the character. After all, an ex scientist/pilot/war hero/cop must be a pretty cool guy.

By: Bracket

Bracket — Sat, 26 Dec 2009 20:50:05 +0000

Great story. Really liked the narrative of a confused mind. This could have been a confusing rambling mess with that idea but you held it together really well. You have great writing talent.

By: Cherry Darling

Cherry Darling — Tue, 24 Nov 2009 00:30:01 +0000

I absolutely loved this story. This was a really great perspective.

By: Tim

Tim — Thu, 19 Nov 2009 18:46:06 +0000

Nice story, i loe how disgruntled he seems, and how i can really set myself into his confusion, good job !!

By: JparkerKC

JparkerKC — Tue, 20 Oct 2009 17:22:12 +0000

Liked the confused first person perspective. Better bitten then starving to death in a locked up house. Sometimes senility has its little advantages.

By: Rick

Rick — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 03:02:30 +0000

creepy story reminds me of that story “comfort food” i figured you had drawn from that similar but less sad, i like!

By: Mark O'Neill

Mark O'Neill — Thu, 15 Oct 2009 07:04:46 +0000

Great point, Tasha. Our very humble narrator would probably be much more tolerant of others and progressive were he without this condition. He has definite long and short term memory problems, so, to him, it’s not 2012(WWZ-time) but any time in the past that his memory turns to. So he may at times believe the Cold War is still occurring. One of the stories on this site “Comfort Food” was a great inspiration for my writing this and much more heartbreaking. I tried to inject some levity, whereas “Comfort Food” really couldn’t allow for it. I mean, hey! It’s a little kid!

By: Tasha

Tasha — Wed, 14 Oct 2009 16:50:31 +0000

Great story really drew me in and I felt more terrified for him that a zombie would actually enter his home and really confuse him by trying to eat him. I wonder how he would insult a feeding zombie? To think of all those who have mental illnesses or children left on their own and how they could handle such a thing. Frightening!