ex. “The only thing he could conclude, after turning its head into jelly, was it could smell him. Either that or it’s hearing was so good it could detect a heartbeat over at least 20 feet.”

and

ex. “He was dressed in green army camo gear he had removed from a dead soldier. Oh how he had loved doing that. They had come across the bodies of six dead soldiers a few days ago and raided them for supplies. As well as the clothing they had managed to loot several ration bars, some basic medical supplies, two handguns with a few spare magazines of ammo and three grenades. Of course things weren’t that simple. John had to strip all six bodies in order to find something that fitted and wasn’t to badly torn or caked in dry blood. Then some zombies, possibly the ones who had killed the soldiers, had decided to make an appearance and the group had to use up several rounds of the ammunition in order to escape. But it was a good find in the long run.”

As Kevin mentioned… try to break the story into smaller, more digestible pieces. Perhaps sharing a few different character perspectives.

Good Luck.