Comments on: DEADLY COMMUTE by William Robinson

By: Josh

Josh — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 08:27:29 +0000

wow that was awesome hope for a second telling of what become of “Daniel’s Army”

By: ScottB

ScottB — Fri, 14 May 2010 21:46:42 +0000

I really enjoyed that, very much. I loved it when hoodie said, “I don’t mean to be a cliche”. Very nice.

However, I did notice a few spelling errors. Also, when one chap said, “we must be a hundred miles from the sea.” Actually in Britain you are never more than 70.2 miles away from the sea.

As you can imagine though, neither of those things even remotley ruined it for me. Keep it up man.

By: anarchy112

anarchy112 — Wed, 10 Mar 2010 16:38:57 +0000

that was an amazing story dude

By: Drew Fuller

Drew Fuller — Tue, 09 Mar 2010 17:18:00 +0000

I really enjoyed the turn at the intro with the x-box. Also, you have a really solid voice throughout. I really liked the British feel.

By: Ben Grove

Ben Grove — Tue, 02 Mar 2010 10:56:32 +0000

Loved it loved it loved it. I’ve done that London train commute in the past and could picture that a scene at Waterloo Station. Great used of traditional British weaponry -the umbrella.

By: Brad

Brad — Mon, 01 Mar 2010 01:06:26 +0000

Great story, very entertaining!

By: Clicint

Clicint — Fri, 26 Feb 2010 04:01:14 +0000

IT WAS GREAT!! i like the x box beginning, i thought the battle had already begun
I’m ready for part 2. I like Virgil, or Hoodie!

By: Nick G

Nick G — Wed, 24 Feb 2010 19:11:07 +0000

Nicely done story, kept me biting my nails and waiting on the edge of my seat to see what happened. You are a very creative writer and you used a very good structure in this story. Can’t wait for the next!

By: Tony C

Tony C — Mon, 22 Feb 2010 21:10:50 +0000