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    LAST DAY AT WORK by T.J. McFadden
    February 22, 2010  Short stories   Tags:   

    Okay, so I was not “situationally aware” that morning. Sue me.

    Considering what I had planned, you’d think I’d be all keyed up. But last night I’d been all alone in the house. The house that had been empty since my wife took our kids back to South Carolina, two weeks ago. My only companion had been a fifth of Jack and the week-old notice that I was being replaced at my job. It had arrived the same day as the third final notice from the pediatricians and the second final notice from the dentists.

    “Dear Officer (fill in the blank) Despite your spotless record, seven years of service with no late days or absences and previous promises that you would be promoted to take charge of the Security Department at Malden College, we are throwing you out on your ass because we found a security company that was better than you at sucking up to us.”

    Okay, I’m paraphrasing. You get the idea.

    So I wasn’t attentive when I drove into the campus. I remember seeing the crashed police car near the gate, but it didn’t register at the time. My mind was somewhere else. Ditto for the several dozen students staggering around the campus and some general disorder. The crashed cars actually got my attention. It must have been a hell of a party. No ambulances though, so they must have gotten there already. Or so I thought. So I parked my rustbucket Crown Vic in my normal space and suddenly there’s a student throwing himself against the passenger door.

    I got out. This kid was bloody. Slashed, on his face and arm. Reflex reminded me there was a first aid kit in the Security office, ten steps away in the Maintenance Building. “Hey! Student! What’s going on-”

    I began walking towards him.

    He snarled.

    Suddenly, I noticed that half a dozen of the nearest students, the ones who’d been staggering around, were now staggering towards me.

    “Flynn! Get down!” Tony Nudo, the old LT who bossed our department. An army vet, like me. Barking orders. Reflex cut in, I dropped.

    Gunshot.

    Another gunshot.

    The bloody student dropped, half his skull missing. I looked at Nudo. His hand was bandaged. He was holding that .38 he thought none of us knew about, the one he kept under a false bottom of his desk.

    “Ell-Tee, are nuts?”

    “Get in here Flynn! Now!”

    The other bloody students were staggering faster, coming towards me. Okay, something was off. Then the LT started firing, single, careful shots, dropping the students.

    I had to stop this. I threw myself at him, tackling him as I shove him in through the door.

    Somebody slammed and locked the door behind me. I heard hands pounding on the fire door.

    Lt. Nudo didn’t seemed angry that I’d tackled him. The jowly old guy grinned and winked at me. “Good reflexes Danny. Not so hard next time though, okay? Help me up.”

    Earl Helmuth, one of the University maintenance guys, had locked the door. He was holding an axe.

    I got off the LT, moving so as not to do any more damage. The bandaged hand looked nasty enough. We were in the garage of the maintenance building. Around us were the University’s trucks, a backhoe, tractors, a lawn mower. The walls were hung with tools. The only windows were slightly above head level, for light, not sightseeing. I heard more banging at the door. “What the hell is going on? What happened to those students out there?”

    “You’d know if your phone wasn’t off the hook, Flynn. Been trying to reach you since four this morning.” Groaning, the LT started up the stairs to the offices. “It started sometime last night. People acting crazy, biting each other. I got a call from Ericson, he said some of the students were acting crazy. When I got here, Ericson and Chang were gone, no idea where they went. I think those guys out there ate them.”

    “Ate them?” For a moment, I thought, hoped, prayed it was a prank. For about two seconds. This was way beyond people’s ability to fake. We stepped into the security office. It looked bare. We’d been stripping out our personal stuff for the last week, ever since they told us we were all being fired. The incoming Security company had made it plain they had no intention of hiring any of us. I looked out the windows.

    There were dozens of bloody people, standing around. One person running, chased by a staggering mob. More of them clustered around the dorms.

    I could see Mount Hope hospital from the window. All eight stories were spewing smoke and fire. So much for ambulance service. “Any word on the guys who were replacing us?”

    “Nary a one.”

    Bainer, the youngest and newest of us, was watching the TV we kept in the office. “Yo, check this.They been repeating it for half an hour.”

    The announcer, his perfect voice cracking, his perfect hair mussed. No tie. There were sweat stains in the armpits of his shirt. “The latest word from the Sheriff’s department is do not let anyone who has bite wounds or wounds of any kind touch you. It is some kind of disease, similar to rabies, causing individuals to attack and bite other human beings. The people who have been bitten then attack others, spreading the disease. We have unconfirmed reports – oh, come on! You can’t want me to – Okay, okay, I’ll read it. That these are the bodies of the dead. The recently dead. Somehow attacking the living. There’s another unconfirmed report that shooting them in the head is the only way to stop them.”

    “Unconfirmed my ass.” The Lt. sat down in his chair, suddenly looking tired. He flipped open his pistol, replaced the expended rounds one handed as he waved his bandaged hand. “I put three slugs into the little girl who did this. Damn near took off my hand before I shot her between the eyes. Then she dropped. Just our luck the college always wanted their security to be unarmed, huh?”

    Bainer swore. “Damn. Two tours in Iraq and I come home to this? I knew I never should have gone to work as unarmed security. What do we do now?”

    “I got my twelve gauge out in my truck, if we can get to it.” Earl spoke up. His axe already had blood on the blade. It didn’t seem to make him any more confident. “Kinda makes me think of when I used to play dungeons and dragons. We’d have called them things zombies.”

    Things began sliding into place in my head. I looked out the window. Dozens of those things. Zombies. Clustered around the dorms. Trying to bite people. If they were trying to bite people, those dorms must seem like a buffet to them.

    My hangover had gone away. I got up and walked to my locker. “Y’know, I’ve never been the right man in the right place at the right time before. It feels pretty good.”

    I opened my locker and pulled out the AKM inside it. The bag of six 30-round magazines for it as well. I tossed that to Bainer. “You did two tours in Iraq, you should know how to use that thing.”

    Bainers’ eyes went wide. Then he crammed a magazine into the weapons and jacked the bolt, chambering a round.

    I pulled the two TEC-9′s out of their back, shoved in the mags. Each had two 30 round magazines, jungle-clipped. The TEC-9 is a cheap piece of junk but it had been all I could afford and right now, it was 60 bullets I could fire off without reloading.

    Lt. Nudo and Helmuth looked at me in shock. Bainer looked even paler than he had looked before. “What the hell were those doing in your locker?”

    “I was a boy scout, El-tee. Be prepared, right?” Last, I pulled out the old Mauser rifle. I only had a hundred rounds for the ancient cannon, but what can you do? I handed it to Helmuth. “You can shoot this, right?”

    Helmuth didn’t bother arguing. He loaded the rifle.

    “Okay, Helmuth, you go up on the roof and start popping zombies with the Mauser. Us three, we’ll go out the side door. I don’t think there are any zombies there. We’ll clear the street.”

    Bainer spoke up. “With this rifle, I can nail them with head shots from the roof too. AK’s aren’t’ accurate, but within a hundred yards, I can hit what I aim at.”

    “Okay, you two go up on the roof and start clearing us some space. El-tee, you feel up to clearing the streets with me?”

    He was looking pretty rough. But he got up. “You have the firepower, Flynn. Unless you’re willing to give me one of those TEC-9′s?”

    I could actually grin. “No way in hell. Just watch my back.”

    That was how we went out the side door. It was like clockwork. I’d been practicing with the TEC-9′s and in my hands, sixty bullets meant sixty dead zombies. Well, fifty, maybe. Forty definitely. A solid forty kills and change. I learned to concentrate on firing one at a time. Occasionally, I’d hear the LT pop one that was coming at us from the side. The guys on the roof were doing their job as well. We rolled up one side of the nearest dorm and down another. I barely had time for a clip change, as they came from all directions, looking for whoever was shooting. That made it easier. After a hot 15 minutes, most of the campus seemed clear. Except for bloody corpses, the non-moving kind.

    One of the students from the dorm came running at me. I almost shot her before I recognized Annie Traxler, the Dorm manager for one of the girl’s dorms. She was carrying a baseball bat and wearing a hockey mask and work gloves. It looked kind of odd with the “Hello Kitty” T-shirt she had on, but who was I to judge? Besides, I liked her. She brought us cookies last Christmas. “Mr Flynn! Thank heavens you’re here. We’ve got those crazy people all around the outside of the dorm. They’ve tried to break in and bite us! They pulled- they pulled my best friends out and she screamed and-”

    I was about to grab her by the shoulders when she steadied herself. “What do we do?”

    “Barricade the ground floors and get everyone on the second and third floors of the dorms. Then find anything heavy, anything that might crack a skull and drop it on them from the third floor. See if you can find some kind of protective gear, anything to keep them from biting you. Gloves, leather jackets, football padding, whatever. And if they get in the building, you need some of your girls with clubs. Axes. Anything they can grab to bust these things in the head. You got that??

    Just then, half a dozen of them came shambling towards us. Annie screamed. I popped them, then realized I had to be low on ammo. I had a couple of boxes of loose 9mm back at the locker to reload. I turned to Lt. Nudo. “Ell-tee, you got anything to..”

    Nudo looked awful. Almost ready to faint. He was still trying to load his pistol. Annie grabbed him before he fell. “We need a doctor.”

    “It’s way beyond that, Annie. Get back to the dorms and get your girls organized. If the cell phones are still working, can you call the kids in the other dorms, tell them what I told you?”

    “I want to go with you. We don’t have any guns back at the dorms.”

    “Annie, your people need you. You have to get them organized or they’ll all die.”

    She sniffed and nodded, getting steadier. Then she kissed me on the cheek and ran back to her dorm.away.

    Heh. Go figure. My last day of this job wasn’t what I’d expected.

    I got Nudo back to the office, taking him up the stairs in a fireman’s’ carry. Every step reminded me of how out of shape I’d become the last ten years. Up on the roof, I could hear Helmuth and Bainer firing, slowly now. Good. Conserving ammo. I put the LT in a chair, looked at his bite mark. Dark red and black streaks were running up his arm. He was perspiring, panting for breath, fevered.

    On the TV, I couldn’t help but hear one of the network doctors speaking frantically in a sing-song Indian accent. “This conforms to no known plague of any kind. There are over two hundred reported infection sites, scattered all over the world. There could be hundreds more not reported. This could be everywhere.”

    “But what is the cure?” The network anchor, speaking in a desperate tone that I’m sure they don’t teach in broadcasting school.

    “There is no cure. No antibiotics or anti-virals have even slowed the infection, let alone reversed it. Every bite victim, even those bitten in the most minor ways, all of them have died and then reanimated. There have been no exceptions.”

    I looked at the Lt. He looked bad. Eyes red-rimmed, face pale. He handed me his .38. I took it, made him as comfortable as I could on the couch in the office, the ragged couch we put against the wall when they pulled out half of our lockers. “I don’t want to be one of those things, Flynn. You’ll take care of that, won’t you?”

    “Gotcha covered, El-tee. Y’know, I was pretty mad at you this morning, but, well, hell, you been a good guy to work for.”

    “And you were always a whiny pain in the ass, Flynn. But I could always count on you.”

    He gave his last chuckle then. It turned into a death rattle. A real death rattle, honest. He spasmed and died.

    I took the ball peen hammer we keep in the toolbox. Gotta save ammo. Crush his skull. But I couldn’t. Not him.

    I laid him on the floor and cuffed his hands and ankles together instead.

    Helmuth called down on our walkie talkies. “Y’all gotta see this! Up on the roof!”

    I went up to the roof.

    It was quite a sight.

    Columns of smoke were rising in all directions from burning buildings. The neighborhood to our south was a poor, older neighborhood. It had been nicer when the university was founded, back when there were actually factories with decent jobs to be had in this town. As it had gone downhill, the University had erected a six-foot high brick wall, very attractive. It had one gate.

    Apparently, people had been dying in that neighborhood last night. A lot of people.

    And they were all coming through the gate.

    Earl whistled. “Must be a couple-thousand of ‘em.”

    Dead winos, not looking much more bedraggled than they had in life. Dead old grannies. Dead students, killed at their off-campus rentals. Dead EMT’s, cops, firemen who’d been called in to help and died not knowing what killed them. Worst of all, the children. How many had died in their beds? Hiding, running from adults who were suddenly monsters worse than any of their nightmares?

    That was when it really hit me. What justified this? How could they have possibly deserved to die? What right did anyone have to kill them? But I’d been ready to-

    I shook my head. I was getting off track. Deal with it later. Tactical problem now. Large number of hostiles, moving slowly. “Bainer, how are you for ammo?”

    “Sorry dude, down to your last magazine. You got any more ammo?”

    “If we survive this, there’s a gun shop three blocks to the north of here. We’ll hit that and load up. But we have to stop that bunch or they’ll swarm the campus.”

    “Good luck at that.”

    “Oh, I have an idea. You have the keys to the snowplow, right?”

    “Nope. Simonides took the keys and locked himself in his office.”

    Oh great. Steve Simonides, head of the University Support Services. The guy who’d made the decision to replace us. Gads, I hated that little weasel. We went down to his office.

    I banged on the door. “Simonides, open up!”

    “Flynn, you will use a civil tone when you speak to me!” The mans’ quavery voice was hard enough to hear through the door. “You have a job to do! Go do it!”

    “Steve, we need the snow plow keys.”

    “That is not security equipment! And there’s no snow!”

    That was it. It took me three tries to kick in the door. Simonides was screaming for the police by the second kick. I came through the door, a reloaded TEC-9 in either hand. He handed the keys to me, silently. I could smell urine in the room as we left. So he wet himself. It was better than what I’d been planning to do to him.

    Okay, it made me smile a little.

    I tossed the plow keys to Earl. Bainer was there too. The snowplow was a medium sized dump truck with a massive plow blade on the front. I’ve seen it crack through two inches of ice. “Earl, start it up and lock the door. Bainer, get in the back, keep those things from getting in. I want you to plow clean through that bunch coming onto campus in the slow plow, then turn around and come right back through. I’ll be right behind you, in my Crown Victoria.”

    “Shouldn’t you be in the back of the truck too?”

    “Nah. I got a little surprise. But when I honk my horn, stop the damn truck. Got it?”

    “Okay, Flynn, it’s your funeral. Good luck!”

    I made my preparations in the car. Had my button ready to press.

    For his part, Earl drove like a champ. He hit the zombie tide at forty, the big diesel engine roaring. Bodies flew everywhere. I followed, bumping furiously on the crushed bodies on the road. Amid the horror, I suddenly got a new dread. What if I messed up my suspension on the corpses?

    But we made it through into a spot where the zombies were thin. We turned, banging the occasional zombie even now, sending them flying. Then Earl was plowing through again, bodies flying until I leaned on my horn. The truck jolted to a stop. I stopped as fast as I could, hit the button, went out through the sun roof. Bainer was using up his last few rounds to give me cover as I leaped into the back of the truck. “Go, go, go!”

    I felt cold bloody hands grabbing at my ankles. I slipped back as the truck jolted, rolling forward, me holding onto the smooth metal of the truck. Dead hands began to squeeze.

    Bainer grabbed me, gripping one of the safety grips and pulling.

    I felt myself being torn in half.

    Undead muscle gave way, damp body fluids cool on my leg while Bainer pulled me up into the truck.

    I had a few seconds to realize I was going to live.

    Then my car exploded.

    Well, the two hundred pounds of high-nitrate fertilizer and diesel oil in my back seat exploded.

    The Crown Vic, all American heavy metal that it was, disintegrated.

    A wave of shrapnel tore through the zombies, dropping most of those it didn’t vaporize.

    We got cheers as we rolled back into campus. The football team had decided to make themselves useful. They had on all their protective gear, including what looked like arm guards and padding borrowed from the hockey team. Their weapons were an interesting mix of bats, axes and shovels. The mascot was leading them, in his outfit. I guess it’s good to have a team called the Crusaders if it gives you a mascot wearing full plate armor and waving a broadsword.

    I went up to the office as they congratulated themselves. A couple of the halfbacks took the opportunity to bust open a soda machine and pass around free drinks. Me, I steadied myself for what I knew I’d find.

    The El-tee’s body was there. He was gone. A snarling, milky-eyed horror was in his place, thrashing in the cuffs. Wrists and ankles already bloody. I took the ball peen hammer, got ready to do my job.

    “Why did you have those guns?” Simonides, behind me. He had recovered a little nerve. “What was that explosion? Why did your car-”

    He went silent as I glared at him. Then I cracked the skull of the zombie with a hammer. It stopped moving.

    I got up, wiped my hand. “Hey director, what can I say/ It was going to be my last day at work.”

    The look of horror in his eyes was truly sweet.

    I laughed.

    “Oh chill out. I’m all better now. I just needed to be shown what’s really important. We need to establish a perimeter. Organize the students to defend themselves. Get some real weapons. If this plague is worldwide, it could get really bad.”

    “You will do no such thing! As soon as I can get my call through to the police- I’m on hold for the Chief now, he and I-”

    I couldn’t help it. I laughed. “You do that. I guess this isn’t my last day at work after all.”

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    44 Comments (Leave a comment)

    1. good story, i didn’t understand why the hell he had the guns for until the end lol as soon as i realized he had a bomb in the car all i could say is “no F******* WAY MAN!” I wouldn’t mind finding out what happens to the guy???

      Comment by Rick on February 22, 2010 @ 4:49 pm

    2. Pretty good, however there were a lot of literary mistakes. “and them?” etc.
      The story was mismatched and just had no structure besides basic paragraphing skipping from one thing to another with a flick of your wrist.
      Than there’s also the fact that not only did the “unarmed” college security officers have Multiple RIFLES(Not pistol which could be easily concealed and brought into a work place) But rifles, Aks, A Mauser, Two fully automatic TECs, and than to top it off he car was prepared as a bomb?

      Comment by Andrew on February 22, 2010 @ 5:29 pm

    3. It was a fun story. If you cannot figure out why an “unarmed security guard” had all those weapons, reread the last few paragraphs and think about the fact he was gettign fired and was somewhat disgruntled.

      Comment by Rick on February 22, 2010 @ 6:03 pm

    4. I believe he had stocked the weapons because he was going to go “Postal” and tear the place up.

      Comment by Sumner on February 22, 2010 @ 7:33 pm

    5. Good story…postal man saves the day!

      Comment by Bill on February 22, 2010 @ 11:33 pm

    6. not bad at all , i dont mind the mistakes makes it seem more real

      Comment by uncleb on February 22, 2010 @ 11:35 pm

    7. Ahh. I didn’t get the ‘Postal’ bit. It was a little too subtle for me and so I also didn’t get why he had so many guns (Mind you I just thought he was an American and you all have guns don’t you?) and so I didn’t give it much thought.

      Its a different story with that in mind. Good characters as well. I spotted a couple of mistakes but given that none of us will pay for professional editting my view is that if you have proofed it as best you can, with the resources you have, and its readable, does it ultimately matter if there is the odd typo or grammar error?

      Comment by Pete Bevan on February 23, 2010 @ 4:21 am

    8. Who cares about the mistakes! This was just flat out a good story. I too did not put two and two together about all the guns in his locker until it hit me with the car bomb. Wow!
      Talk about a change of plans for this guy. “Y’know, I’ve never been the right man in the right place at the right time before. It feels pretty good.” Great line. This was fun to read. Keep up the good work.

      Comment by Rob on February 23, 2010 @ 9:19 am

    9. Loved it. Understood it. Lots of potential in it. Good time on a bad day!

      Comment by Mac on February 23, 2010 @ 10:10 am

    10. I didn’t mind the mistakes because these are fan stories, and not professionally edited works. I applaud people’s creativity and bravery for writing a story, and then allow nameless internet surfers to critique it. I don’t see a problem with the critiques as long as they are honest and complementary, but not smug and hurtful. Most writers appreciate constructive criticism. I did have an issue with the guy having all of the weapons until I figured out “why”, and then I thought it a bit poetic that the “postal security guard” becomes the hero of the day. I did take issue with the snow plow “breaking through two inches of ice”. I’m not saying it can’t, but having once had a job where I had to repair all of the damage that ices can do to a snowplow, no matter how large, I got a small chill in my back and my hands started to ache (LOL). I mean come on guys it’s called a snowplow for a reason, and not an ice breaker.

      Comment by Chris on February 23, 2010 @ 10:38 am

    11. Great story,

      Its a fan site all of you trolls need to go back to your MMO’s and troll there.

      I love reading the stories and I don’t mind a few mistakes so long as the story is interesting, this story was interesting.

      A follow up would be nice this site has good stories but not very timely post. If the trolls submitted stories instead of flaming on small errors .. geez get a life.

      Comment by Ghostwalker on February 23, 2010 @ 11:15 am

    12. I loved this story. =D I figured he was going to suicide after the exposition about losing his job and his family, but it wasn’t until he popped open the locker that I realized he was going to go Virginia Tech on the place.

      Excellent work!

      Comment by Christine on February 23, 2010 @ 11:20 am

    13. Great story, loved the “postal” angle, typos? who cares. GREAT WORK!
      Would like to read more about Flynn & Co. Ahooahaa!

      Comment by RedneckZombieHunter on February 23, 2010 @ 11:47 am

    14. Come on folks!

      The wife’s gone,
      the kids are gone,
      the job’s gone,
      the house is bare,
      the bills are long overdue,
      and he’s describing rot-gut whisky as a “companion”.
      Plus, he seems to be A LITTLE bitter about the letter…

      This guy has been sliding for a llooonnnnggggg time and it comes across in the first four paragraphs.

      Don’t any of you work in offices?

      T.J., I think you did a great job of establishing the characters quickly and efficiently with a minimum of exposition.

      I loved it when you gave the Mauser to “Helmuth”. Archaic German gun, archaic German name. In my mind, that simple gesture (and the mention that he didn’t bother arguing) created an image of an old German immigrant who doesn’t like to talk about his childhood summers in the Hitler Youth. Anybody who can establish a character with such Spartan verbiage is doing alright.

      Comment by Zombob on February 23, 2010 @ 12:27 pm

    15. Fantastic, that story is just plain fun. You should keep it up, like your style.

      Comment by Joe from Philly on February 23, 2010 @ 1:04 pm

    16. Great read, keep up the good work.

      Comment by Doc on February 23, 2010 @ 4:01 pm

    17. A good story. It has all the right ingredients you need. A good location, a good main character, the guy you want to hate and lots of zombies. Don’t get hung up on comments about spelling. I doubt anyone who has submitted a story has done so without a least one spelling or grammar error, I know I made several in mine. Oh and you may want to check your own comments Andrew before criticising others “and than to top it off he car was prepared as a bomb” I count two grammar errors in that line :)

      Comment by Nick Lloyd on February 23, 2010 @ 5:08 pm

    18. great story man caught on to the bitter part quick. Anger loss of family job who doesn,t get depressed write more please and who cares about a few errors this ain’t english class lol.

      Comment by JERRY A on February 23, 2010 @ 6:52 pm

    19. Ok this Story was nice, Kept me entertained But it was thrown off whe nthey pulled out of knowhere the AR and two tec nines. why would a security gaurd and a lowlife janitor have battle ready assault rifles just laying around. good story But bad come ups

      Comment by ChodyOwns on February 24, 2010 @ 1:39 am

    20. As soon as dude pulled all the guns out of his locker, I already had a feeling about what he’d planned. Nice job!

      Comment by Cherry Darling on February 24, 2010 @ 5:16 am

    21. ChodyOwns , how is it you and nobody else gets that the guy was ex military.. and that he was going to go postal at work because he has lost everything in his life .ie the guns , bomb in his car etc etc please try to keep up

      Comment by uncleb on February 24, 2010 @ 10:52 am

    22. Great humour; I love the one-liners. Reminded me a little bit of the way “Max Payne” was narrated….

      Comment by Mark on February 24, 2010 @ 10:12 pm

    23. Great story, I really enjoyed it and wished it was going to keep going. I was disappointed when it ended, but only because I was enjoying it.

      Great work, keep up the story telling!

      Comment by kineo on February 25, 2010 @ 5:10 pm

    24. Great tale! I really enjoyed this one. Ya gotta give us more!

      I love sarcastic, one-liner spouting good guys. Yeah, some of it was cliche, there were a few minor grammar errors.

      S O W H A T???

      Cliches work because they are familiar and usually true. The fun I had reading the story more than outweighed any errors.

      More, please!

      Comment by cdugger on February 25, 2010 @ 9:20 pm

    25. Good read, and I promise if I ever submit again I will make everyone forget about any grammar errors in here by the sheer volume in mine :D

      Comment by Poobah on February 26, 2010 @ 12:12 am

    26. Best story i have read in a while. I loved the style the writer used and thought it flowed perfectly. I still can’t believe some people didn’t understand the reason for all his guns though. Pretty disappointing..

      Comment by soccer on February 26, 2010 @ 12:59 am

    27. Note to self: Take the time to read others stories after the two year old has gone to bed. This will allow for correct concentration on the story, and prevent further commentators taking the michael. :)

      Comment by Pete Bevan on February 26, 2010 @ 3:10 am

    28. Hated the story. Absolutely hated it. From the stereotypical garbage of a general ranting about “commie pinkos” to the ultra-cliched vast government conspiracy, this story is a real stinkeroo. But I’m certain that some people will love it, as those stereotypes and cliches wouldn’t become such cliches if they didn’t satisfy the smug (and utterly unwarranted) sense of superiority of a bunch of losers.

      Comment by Tom McSadden on February 26, 2010 @ 8:01 am

    29. Thanks for the kind words everyone and thank you for your patience with the typos-its a bad habit I have,once I finish the story I just have to post it immediately and too often I do it without properly proofreading. I don’t normally do dark humor,but if you can’t pull dark humor out of a zombie apocalypse, where can you? Pete- especially liked the joshing from across the pond. btw,anyone who wants to trade ideas indivivually, I can be reached at Author2c@aol.com

      Comment by Tim McFadden on February 26, 2010 @ 8:09 pm

    30. Great read, You’ve set it up for more adventures from this guy, I hope to read them!

      Comment by Brad on February 28, 2010 @ 9:42 am

    31. Liked it a lot. Great role reversal of a character who was going to become a monster but becomes a hero when real monsters show up!!! I see no problem having a locker filed with automatic weapons. How else are we all to deal with the impending zombie holocaust? Harsh language? :)

      Comment by Ben Grove on March 2, 2010 @ 4:47 am

    32. Interesting, I was not much impressed at the beginning but the ending surprised me. It is a good twist

      It´s cool how changed the role of your protagonist from villan to hero, and save this to the ending.

      Comment by Renato on March 3, 2010 @ 5:24 pm

    33. This was a great story! Grammar is important BUT the story speaks for it’s self!! I love that he was going to go “postal” on the school! Gives it a real feeling! Keep up the wonderful work! Can’t wait to read more from you!

      Comment by Jen on March 8, 2010 @ 7:54 pm

    34. Oohh Snizap! Dude was gonna columbine the school! I LOVE IT!

      Comment by Kevin on March 9, 2010 @ 8:10 am

    35. Awesome read. What a great turn about from postal to savior. Write more, that was good.

      Comment by itor66 on March 9, 2010 @ 2:36 pm

    36. This is a great story. Techniques improve with experience. Don’t let the nay sayers get to you. Keep at it and give us another great story.

      Comment by Les on March 10, 2010 @ 7:12 pm

    37. Good story, nice witty prose. I enjoyed it quite a bit, and got all the subtleties. This is a FUN zed story, and, in that regard, a welcome and refreshing change of pace from the de riguer melancholy Cormac McCarthy-style zed stuff that’s been popping up of late.

      Comment by Jim on March 14, 2010 @ 1:27 pm

    38. so, I never, and I mean I NEVER leave comments about stories, until now,

      BRAVO!!!! so nicely done, I loved it!!!!!!
      kinda seemed a little reminiscent of beverly hills cop but I loved how he just goes about the “duties” of his “Job” like killin zombies is just ALL he has been waiting for!!!!, EXCELLENT EXCELLENT!!!!

      Comment by Ole_Salty_Union_Cracker_jack on March 19, 2010 @ 12:14 pm

    39. I liked it. It was a fun story with a nice twist.

      The only improvements I can think of are also some “cliche” things. Like I personally get tired of the whiney bureaucrat stereotype.

      Comment by Wrenage on March 19, 2010 @ 2:35 pm

    40. Absolutely Loved It !
      I suspected something when he had all the weapons in his locker and extra ammo but the bomb in the car was a sweet twist to the story!

      Comment by L Martin on June 10, 2010 @ 4:02 pm

    41. Try opening a second window to Youtube and playing Butthole Surfers’ “Pepper” in the background as they go out the door. It’s fun. :-)

      Comment by T.J. McFadden on April 26, 2011 @ 6:23 pm

    42. you’ve got a great mind for plot and detail… and i kind of get the way your mind works been reading up all the stories you have posted hare… andi am very impressed… i’m a fan for sure…

      and for all the people who are confused why unarmed security would have so many guns… we he was planning to kill some students and the piss ant director to blow off some steam for getting fired……

      :)

      mail me some times… i would truly like to proof anything you write…

      and would mine befriending a person with an exquisite mind like yours…

      waqas.rabbani@live.com

      Comment by waqas on September 18, 2011 @ 10:25 am

    43. i just read my comment… Apologize for the typos seems like i have a nasty habit of posting first and reading later :P

      Comment by waqas on September 18, 2011 @ 10:28 am

    44. mint!:)

      Comment by john on September 21, 2011 @ 4:15 pm

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